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Ardhanarishvara Part Nine

Header & Disclaimer in Part One

Part Two

Part Three

Part Four

Part Five

Part Six

Part Seven

Part Eight





Caveat Lector.






~*~


The jumper bay echoes with a loud clang and a spat of furious Czech as one of the Marines fumbles a shell from the pallet. Zelenka is on him like a rabid monkey, hands flying even faster than Rodney's own usually do, pointing and waving a finger in the much larger man's face, ending with a furious "BOOM!" The Marine goes red and then white under Zelenka's tirade, while his two team mates wrestle the shell full of napalm and High Explosive back onto the transport pallet.

Beside him, Sheppard leans against the wall, arms crossed, the picture of the casual flyboy – girl – except for her grim expression. The other pilots are waiting on her orders, none of them but the youngest, newest Air Force lieutenant, Palecki, looking excited. But Palecki's green, just came in with the last Daedalus visit, and can be forgiven. Rodney's not sure the kid's even been off-world before. He wonders if he shouldn't take the lieutenant aside and give him some sage, Rodney McKay save-your-life advice since he's an old veteran.
He decides against it. It might spook the civilians riding along. Not that any of them are pilots, but they'll be in the seats, working the lifesign detectors, ready to testify the mission was conducted with full civilian oversight from start to finish. No one is going to stick Sheppard with another black mark if he and Elizabeth have their way.
The scientists are bunched together, standing a little to the side of the pilots, all of them watching and listening to Sheppard.

"We're taking six jumpers," Sheppard says. "Everyone's simmed this to death with the water canisters on the mainland. Don't make the mistake of thinking that's the same thing as a real mission. You won't have a wingman. You'll stay cloaked at all times, in radio contact with Jumper One. We will proceed through the stargate in sequence to Heka and assume grid position before flying to the target. Everyone has a co-pilot. Your co-pilot will double-check the life sign detectors before you deploy your payload. If you register anything bigger than one of those lizard-dogs, you will abort. Is that understood?"

Lorne nods, so do Palecki, Miller, Reyes, and Crown. Simpson and the rest of the scientists bob their heads as well.

"All right," Sheppard says with a sharp nod of her own. She pushes off the wall and strides toward Zelenka. Rodney trots after her after nodding to Simpson, who will be overseeing the system she and Zelenka designed while flying with Lorne. She looks nervous, which he thinks makes a lot more sense than Palecki's bounce and grin. The others scatter to their assigned jumpers.

"Zelenka!" Sheppard shouts over the clatter and ringing of the next two pallets of shells being wheeled in.

Zelenka spins in place, his hair flying up, eyeglasses glinting. The roof of the jumper bay is open to add some natural light and a beam of it catches on him. Rodney's stomach rolls. It looks just distinct enough to evoke a culling beam.

"What? What? We are busy here, Colonel."

"Everything ready?"

"Yes, of course, everything is ready," Zelenka snaps. His attention is already back on the Marines handling the shells. "Be careful with those, you oafs!" He mutters something about their mothers and swine in Czech, giving Rodney a warm thrill of pride. Before working with Rodney, Zelenka would never have dreamed of cursing and bossing big, tough Marines.

Sheppard stares at the shells, too. Her expression is unreadable. "Then, let's get this show on the road."

"Colonel, you must remember," Zelenka mutters, still frowning at the Marines, "you will have to hover the jumper while we secure the shells in the belly harness and connect the release-and-detonation module to the jumper's instruments. You cannot land the jumper again until you have either launched the ordnance or had it removed."

"Shove it, Zelenka," Sheppard replies, unconcerned. She touches the hull of Jumper One and it responds, the rear entrance hatch lowering.

"Hah!" Zelenka snorts. He's already waving one of the Marine teams over. "Please hover the jumper in the center of the bay for loading, Colonel."

"I've done this before," Sheppard says. She glances over her shoulder. "Coming, Rodney?"

"Yes, right behind you, let's just do this," Rodney says. He follows Sheppard in and starts a systems check as soon as the jumper goes live for Sheppard. Sheppard's calling up HUDs in a dazzling fast flicker from screen to screen, running her own personal checklist on the jumper. One thing he and Sheppard always agree on is running a flight check. Not that they always have the luxury of doing so.

"Everything good to go?" she asks without looking away from the displays.

"Yes." Rodney double-checks the hybridized bomb launch controls that are spliced into the drone firing system. "We already know this works. We tested it on the mainland."

"This isn't a test." Her voice is tense enough to make him look over at her. Admittedly, she's right. If something went wrong on the mainland, they would just drop the water-filled shell mock-ups and land. Even if the shells didn't release, the jumper could come down on them with nothing more than a wrecked belly harness. The ordnance they're going to carry through the gate is a souped-up super-napalm that will burn fiercer than white phosphorus once it's lit, and a High Explosive charge shaped to detonate and spread the payload over the greatest area possible. Rodney doesn't want to find out how good the jumper's insulation from inside a premature blast.

"Everything checks out," he says quietly.

"Good." Sheppard taps a control. "You know, you don't need to come with me."

"Yes, I do."

"I don't need a co-pilot, not that you're much of a pilot – "

"Hey!"

A quick smile softens the dig. "Good enough, I guess. Just, this is a military operation, start to finish."

"No, it isn't, Sheppard. I'm along as Elizabeth's proxy. She authorized this."

Sheppard hums under her breath. "Okay."

The jumper slips forward out of its charging berth and to the center of the bay, hovering at the optimum height for the Marines to bolt the shells into the belly harness. Rodney activates his radio. "Radek, I want you to double-check every one of the charges on those bolts. If even one of them doesn't blow properly, the payload is going to end up scattered God knows where instead of on target."

"If you had given me two more weeks, I would have given you fire-and-forget targeting system!" Zelenka snaps back. "Mated with the jumpers' drone system instead of this – this bastardization."

"No time to waste, and no materials either, Doctor," Sheppard cuts in.

Rodney's pretty sure Zelenka mutters bullshit to that, but it isn't clear enough to call him on it.

Sheppard's on the radio to Lorne. "Major. Once the gate is dialed into Heka, I'm going to drop my jumper down to the gateroom. When your payload is secure, assume a stacked position above Jumper One and clear the bay for Jumper Three to load. Miller, Crown, you follow in the same sequence. Palecki, Reyes, you'll have to wait until the rest of us have cleared the bay before you can load. Palecki, you load out and gate through immediately. Reyes, you're the last. When you come through the gate, it will shut down. We'll remain on the Atlantis command channel unless circumstances change. Back up channel is Nine. Everyone straight?"

Five confirmations. Rodney ignores them. Why haven't they included a video feed from the belly harness? The jumper's underside is a complete blind spot. The inertial dampeners mean they can't even feel the addition of the extra weight of the shells as they are bolted into place and the wiring hooked up. "Radek? Are you done?"

"I will tell you when idiots are finished – Stop!"

"What?!"

"Do not force the bolt, fool. You're cross-threading it," Zelenka snaps at someone.

Rodney covers his eyes. "We're going to blow up. All of us. In a blaze of shame."

A grim look from Sheppard. "They're ground troops, Rodney, not flight crews. They'll learn."

Rodney. Check system."

It all comes up green, the connections between the jumper and its added-on human armament responding to his thoughts. Sheppard glances at him. Rodney nods. "It's working, Radek."

You may move the jumper out of the way now, Colonel," Zelenka radios.

"Walk your people to the front of the jumper so I can see you're all clear," Sheppard told him. A moment later, Zelenka and four Marines pull the half-empty pallet of shells forward of the jumper's viewport. The biggest Marine gives them a wave.

"Clear."

Sheppard rotates the jumper to face the gate when they drop through the bay to the gateroom. "Control, this is Jumper One. Dial PR3-987."

Jumper One, this is Atlantis Control. Initiating wormhole." Chuck sounds calm as always. Rodney believes Chuck would sound calm if a platoon of Wraith charged through the gate.

"Copy that, Control."

Wormhole open, Jumper One.

"Copy."

The lower doors to the gateroom iris open, and Sheppard settles the jumper down through them. Rodney watches the bronze walls slip by in front of the viewport until they are dropping to sit in front of the shimmering circle of the stargate.

"Major. Load up," Sheppard says.

"Copy, Jumper One."

A sharp burst of static blasts them both, making Rodney flinch and Sheppard frown. "Colonel Sheppard." Elizabeth, of course. She'd looked at the mission prospectus, complete with operation title, that Sheppard handed her, along with Rodney's estimates of how long it would take to manufacture the napalm and delivery system and sighed. "This long?" Sheppard had shrugged. "The survey we flew yesterday showed a population just under a hundred thousand. All of it engaged in either growing staples or skour. Clearing it will take repeated missions, even if they don't replant. This is the plan." She'd looked at the schedule of missions and swallowed. Rodney had been stunned too, when Sheppard showed up, telling him just how much ordnance they'd need. But Weir had swallowed hard, again, and given them the go ahead.

"Copy, Control," Sheppard replies in a monotone. "What's the word? Do we have a go?"

"Go. Cleo. Repeat, Cleopatra."

"Copy, Cleopatra," Sheppard repeats. "Jumper Two, Cleo. Check in."

"Jumper Two, copy, Cleo, clearing the bay now."

"Three, copy."

"Four, copy."

"Jumper Five, I copy."
Palecki's voice cracks. Reyes follows, deep and placid. "Six, good to go."

Sheppard taps off her radio. "Fucking Cleo." Then she flashes an adrenaline-fueled grin at Rodney. "Ready?"

"Like you have to ask," he says with a snort.

When Crown reports in, Sheppard clicks her radio back on. She slips on those black aviator glasses that hide all expression so well, nods – to herself it seems – sharply. "Cloak up and follow me, kids." The jumper slides into the event horizon as if on a track. They exit into the last rays of the Hekan sun dropping, swollen and red, to the horizon. A HUD displaying their jumper as a dot above the grid representing the skour fields pops up. The deep gold light flares through it, reflecting off Sheppard's sunglasses, the glare making Rodney squint. Sheppard's already taking the jumper up, assuming the flight control overview.

"Life signs?" she asks.

Below them, there's a shimmer-shiver in the event horizon. On the HUD, another dot appears: Lorne, Simpson, and Jumper Two.
Rodney ignores it, leaving the flying to Sheppard, and calls up the jumper's life sign detector display. The village where they met the Hekans for the first time is a hotspot, too many lifesigns to count visually. The jumper cooperatively offers a count in the bottom of the display. In Ancient. Rodney scans the fields. They're empty. He locates a line of dots and correlates it: workers – women – trudging along a path between the fields, coming in from a long day in the fields.

"They're leaving the fields now."

"We want the women completely clear before we do this," Sheppard says, voice tight, face set. Rodney refrains from snarking back.

Palecki and Reyes's jumpers arrive and assume position, forming on Jumper One; Palecki as the final point of a two jumper wing trailing from the right side. Jumper Two takes a tail place, like a rudder on the formation. There's no banter on the radio.

"So, is this where we play Ride of the Valkyries?" Rodney asks. "I brought my iPod."

Sheppard flips him off.

She turns the jumper to their first target, which lies in a valley sixty kilometers from the stargate: a fourth village, not as large as the one near the stargate, but surrounded on all sides by acre upon acre of skour. The last glimmer of the sun slips under the western horizon – Rodney calls it west just because it's easier to think of it that way – as they make their first fly-over.

The fields are empty. The valley is already slipping into dusk, while the jumpers are still high enough to have some light. Rodney sucks in a deep breath as Sheppard angles the jumper down. A targeting display pops up, concentric circles narrowing to a single red dot. The jumper shifts sideways, and a second blue circle overlays the first. Sheppard fires the instant she has target lock. The drone control slaved into the release charges blows the bolts holding one of the napalm shells under the jumper's belly. The jumper angles up and away before the shell detonates, raining burning chemicals down, filling the dusk with terrible light.

Each jumper follows Sheppard, laying down napalm over their targets, working a grid pattern in turns, methodically wiping out the skour. The fires burn in great veils reaching into the darkness, curtains of flame, wavering before the wind the jumpers can't feel. Rodney gulps, glad he didn't eat earlier. He imagines being in the village and the fire raging all around him, the choking smoke and heat, ash falling, sparks...All it would take is one spark, drifting on the wind, to light the thatched roofs they'd glimpsed in the first survey.

"Do you think the villagers will go down to the river?" he asks.

Sheppard's face is unreadable. "No way to know."

Unless they come back. Rodney knows now he never wants to come back and see the results of what they've done here and will do again and again.

Palecki whoops as he releases his last shell. "Like the wrath of God!" Rodney risks a glance at Sheppard, dimly lit by the HUDs, flying by instrument, and sees the muscle in her jaw twitch, the taut tendon along her neck.

"Shut up." Someone else radios. Crown, probably. Palecki is silent as they fly back to the stargate and dial Atlantis.

"Everything went all right," Rodney says.

Sheppard slips off the sunglasses that make her thoughts even more of an enigma. "Zelenka and Simpson did good work," she says finally. Nothing about the mission.

Rodney tells himself the jumpers are proof against vacuum. They're sealed.

He can't smell smoke.


~*~



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[info]20thcenturyvole
2006-04-23 03:30 pm UTC (link)
Gulp.

I can't wait to see the results, the fallout of this.

Throughout all this, the characterisation has been wonderful. I want to slap Palecki; I'm glad that everyone else does, too.

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[info]auburnnothenna
2006-04-23 05:17 pm UTC (link)
Ah, Palecki...being an OC, his days are probably numbered. The obligatory newbie, making the stupid remarks so our hero(in)es look better by contrast. He's just in love with the equipment, the power, the techonology and destruction for its own sake. He hasn't ever been on the ground or seen the results. It's the adrenaline rush of doing something and doing it well, even if it is a horrifying something.

There will be more on Heka and the results of the firebombings, of course, though not immediately. It will take many missions before they've made a dent in the skour fields - imagine trying to wipe out all the cornfields in Kansas.

I so surprised and happy by the reactions this plot thread has garnered and that the characterizations, genderswapped or not, are ringing true.

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[info]reginabellatrix
2006-04-23 03:33 pm UTC (link)
Nice. Very intense. Especially the last line. Looking forward to the next part.

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[info]auburnnothenna
2006-04-23 05:27 pm UTC (link)
Very typical last line for me. I'm glad the intensity came through, too. We wanted it fairly strong, but without too much judgment of whether the action is good or bad in the greater picture. All we show is Sheppard's controlled response and Rodney's suddenly greater understanding - it's not theoretical anymore. Not that Rodney hasn't had that hammered into his head already, with Genii bombs in Siege II.

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[info]etben
2006-04-23 03:42 pm UTC (link)
...

You do realize that I love you, right? Because I do, and I want us to be clear on that. I love you with a gut-clenching flailing joy that is second in importance only to how much I love your Sheppard.

You know, I'm pretty sure that there's something deeply wrong with that sentence, and equally pretty sure that I don't care. I love you and this and Sheppard, and that is all I can say.

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[info]auburnnothenna
2006-04-23 05:31 pm UTC (link)
You know, I'm pretty sure that there's something deeply wrong with that sentence

No, no, gut-clenching flailing joy is thrilling. Though possibly uncomfortable for you. Would you like some Pepto to go with it? Or just some more of the story soon?

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(no subject) - [info]etben, 2006-04-23 05:44 pm UTC

[info]gilenaki
2006-04-23 04:01 pm UTC (link)
Enthralling chapters one right after another - you spoil us. :)

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[info]auburnnothenna
2006-04-23 05:33 pm UTC (link)
Thank you. Probably another week before we produce another chunk of this. There's two critical scenes to write and then it will need beta-ing - though our betas have been fantastically swift.

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[info]amothea
2006-04-23 04:09 pm UTC (link)
i'm realling enjoying this story. :)

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[info]auburnnothenna
2006-04-23 05:34 pm UTC (link)
Still? Thank you.

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(no subject) - [info]amothea, 2006-04-23 05:40 pm UTC

[info]j00j
2006-04-23 04:13 pm UTC (link)
This continues to be amazing! I can't wait to see where this goes...

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[info]auburnnothenna
2006-04-23 05:38 pm UTC (link)
It goes on...and on...on. We're not done with Heka yet, though the team will be off to several more planets. The problem of Heka isn't really solved.

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[info]shoemaster
2006-04-23 04:36 pm UTC (link)
Of course the happy shopping trip chapter is followed by this ;) Very intense and interesting, I too, am dying to see what the fallout will be.

Loved that Rodney has been such a bad influence on Radek, and Crown telling Palecki to shut up. Nice job.

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[info]auburnnothenna
2006-04-23 05:44 pm UTC (link)
Loved that Rodney has been such a bad influence on Radek, and Crown telling Palecki to shut up.

Every story needs some Zelenka. He's become more assertive in canon and I wanted to demonstrate that and maybe, part of why. Crown? Well, someone had to tell the kid to zip it.

the happy shopping trip chapter

*snicker* It is, isn't it? You should see the chapter titles in the outline. Well, maybe you will if Mona puts together a commentary. Of course, if that happens, any claim to being deep and intelligent will be blown out of the water.

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[info]chaps1870
2006-04-23 05:08 pm UTC (link)
I really liked Rodney's reflection on what they have done.

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[info]auburnnothenna
2006-04-23 05:50 pm UTC (link)
Using Rodney's POV actually offers a little of the scientific detachment and lets the reader observe and decide whether what's happening is good or bad. He was so taken with figuring out how to make the napalm and deliver it that he didn't really think about the consequences to the people on the ground until they were in the air and on the mission. Not viscerally.

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(no subject) - [info]chaps1870, 2006-04-23 07:01 pm UTC

[info]jaebi_lit
2006-04-23 05:22 pm UTC (link)
Whoa. This chapter read really well, like a tightly plotted, tightly paced action movie, with just the right amount of pre-mission bantering and that edge of energy that comes from adrenaline and doing something. Would that all action movies were this good! Zelenka was lovely!

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[info]auburnnothenna
2006-04-23 05:55 pm UTC (link)
Hey, way to make me blush. That's exactly the effect I was aiming for. Kind of too a three pronged approach to it, including humor on the surface, very visual action and a little more serious mental reflection. The last being the thing no action movie can really provide, since a voice over would wreck most action sequences.

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[info]springwoof
2006-04-23 05:38 pm UTC (link)
i liked the tone and pacing in this scene, especially. the scene felt particularly cinematic, too. well done.

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[info]auburnnothenna
2006-04-23 05:57 pm UTC (link)
It is cinematic and that's deliberate. I wanted to show the...how to put this?...The attraction of doing, of taking action, the strength of forward momentum.

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[info]thepsychicgnome
2006-04-23 06:29 pm UTC (link)
Sharp, concise and professional - the execution of the mission and the reporting of it in the narrative. The thought that they have to do this repeatedly is stomach churning, the strain on them all is so great. And the repercussions? I look forward to where you take this.

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[info]auburnnothenna
2006-04-23 07:09 pm UTC (link)
The thought that they have to do this repeatedly is stomach churning

This is what isn't obvious about Ronon's solution, that logistically it's impossible to accomplish it in a single mission. That's part of why Sheppard was reluctant in Chapter Seven - she's familiar with the drawbacks of a military 'solution'.

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[info]lunasky
2006-04-23 06:39 pm UTC (link)
You guys have me on the edge of my seat. There's gonna be fallout, in some way shape or form, there always is. *gulp*

I truly love how each chapter is distinct and evolving, how we get to see glimpses of how it is affecting each of them. And the shoe shopping was just priceless.

You gals are amazing.

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[info]auburnnothenna
2006-04-23 07:12 pm UTC (link)
You guys have me on the edge of my seat.

We try!

here's gonna be fallout, in some way shape or form, there always is. *gulp*

There's always fallout. In this case it's personal fallout and big picture fallout for the Lanteans and Hekans and some other folks that haven't been introduced yet.

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[info]dossier
2006-04-23 07:21 pm UTC (link)
totally awesome. Sheppard is really still himself (The aviators just caused me to flail), Teyla's anger becomes more reasonable, and Ronon--well what's not to love?

waiting on tenterhooks, though waiting a week is a pretty good thing for me. I skivved off a deadline to catch up here!

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[info]peace_piper
2006-04-23 07:28 pm UTC (link)
I feel really spoiled.... I woke up and got *two* chapters of my now-favorite SGA fic.

I don't have much to say cause I'm still just 'Guh'-ing at my luck and waiting for something heavy to fall off my shelf and break cause I'm never this lucky.

You two get major internet cookies and tea for being so fast.

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[info]cofax7
2006-04-23 09:19 pm UTC (link)
Oh, man.

These people are going to starve. And Atlantis is in no position to help them with that. Plus the backlash against possible trading partners, and their own women. Heck, they may even blame the women, thinking they'd set fire to the fields themselves.

Going into another culture with this kind of solution is just about always catastrophic, because you can't possibly know all the cultural variables that come into play. ::twitches uneasily::

I'm intrigued by your pacing, because I keep thinking we're getting to the climax and then you say something in your comments about more stuff you've got planned. Can you say how many more parts you think this is going to be?

Still really enjoying the characterizations, particularly of Ronon and Teyla.

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[info]mecurtin
2006-04-23 10:11 pm UTC (link)
eeeeeeeeeeee, she whimpers faintly. please don't kill radek. Mona, you sit on Auburn, you *know* what's she's like. My stomach was roiling as I read this, in fear for what they're doing and for what you guys are likely to think up next.

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[info]mecurtin
2006-04-23 10:11 pm UTC (link)
PS yes, that is a compliment.

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(no subject) - [info]auburnnothenna, 2006-04-25 10:13 pm UTC

[info]sobelle
2006-04-24 12:48 am UTC (link)
Absolutely gripping... and I need to be busy packing for my big move... but I've still got 4 weekends... that's enough, right? to move an entire household 2,000 miles?

So when I run up against the deadline I can say that I NEEDED to read this because this is keeping me sane... and freaked out... and amazed... because it's all so good and scarey and thought provoking and always speeding down the rails to total potential terror and chaos... and self discovery (phwoar!)

Oy! I am so glad you all think therefore you write!

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[info]justabi
2006-04-24 01:57 am UTC (link)
My favorite part of this is the contrast of the one excited pilot and John/everyone else. Just makes it so poignant.

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[info]volari
2006-04-24 02:19 am UTC (link)
Ow ow ow ow! My heart! I think you've killed it.

I love how the characters have changed and how they've stayed the same. Visualizing this chapter, my mental image of Sheppard kept switching from girl-version to him from The Storm/Eye.

Ouch. Can't wait to see where this goes next.

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*sighs heavily*
[info]krysalys
2006-04-24 03:06 am UTC (link)
Yeah, but even the memory of smoke is stinging his eyes and nostrils, isn't it?
I have a feeling Rodney's not the only one who'll have nightmares about this planet and all the Atlanteans have done. And that's strangely reassuring to me. Means that he and the others who feel the same are still human... not so hardened (or green like Palecki) that they feel nothing at all.
Oh yeah, there's gonna be long-reaching consequences of this. *shakes head*
I wonder how long it'll take for SGA1 to succumb to the stress of all this, and just how things will come to a head.
So loving this story with each new chapter, m'loves.
----}-@

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[info]brown_betty
2006-04-24 04:33 am UTC (link)
I love the meditation on the difficulties of effecting change in a society. This is smart fic.

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[info]enname
2006-04-24 01:18 pm UTC (link)
I haven't seen napalm (and please may I never) but I have seen enough bushfires to last me a life time. This The fires burn in great veils reaching into the darkness, curtains of flame, wavering before the wind the jumpers can't feel. is so very much what the look like too. I love that bit of imagery and the fact that the jumpers are so insulated that it all seems like some horrid, silent nightmare. Also, strangely beautiful. If utterly terrifying for those at ground level.

Hell, I can smell smoke.

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[info]auburnnothenna
2006-04-25 10:18 pm UTC (link)
I live in wildfire country. Last summer one came close enough I sat up all night, watching a glow on the western horizon where there is no city to provide it, listening to the news updates that the road that continues past where I live had been shut down because of the fire, and smelling the smoke. I might have been even more nervy than that, except I had weeded and scraped and cleared a firebreak around the entire place. Plus, tin roof. Sounds great when it rains, doesn't catch a spark and go up in flames. *g*

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Ardhanarishvara
[info]kiranovember
2006-04-24 10:20 pm UTC (link)
Damn. I can only comment on this part at the moment but I just read five chapters and it's all sloshing around in my head. The ups, the downs ... Teyla bashing marines, all of them with Heightmeyer (oh, John, admitting why you liked Antarctica), the horrible mission to Heka, the retail therapy, and now, napalming the skour fields in hopes of creating social change.


"Yes, of course, everything is ready," Zelenka snaps. His attention is already back on the Marines handling the shells. "Be careful with those, you oafs!" He mutters something about their mothers and swine in Czech, giving Rodney a warm thrill of pride. Before working with Rodney, Zelenka would never have dreamed of cursing and bossing big, tough Marines.

I love this, love Rodney's pride in Zelenka. Of course, once you can stand up and bitch out Rodney, marines are a snap!


Unless they come back. Rodney knows now he never wants to come back and see the results of what they've done here and will do again and again.

They may be at war with the Wraith, but this is a different kind of war, one Rodney hasn't seen before, but which John and Elizabeth are all too familiar with. Which comes back to Ronon's thoughts of Rodney as the idealist in the group.

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[info]looking4tarzan
2006-04-24 11:03 pm UTC (link)
Oh man all I can say is MORE

I just want to see where this goes...the team dynamic the fallout

John and Rodney

yeah i'm a girl with priorities ROFL

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[info]amezri
2006-04-24 11:39 pm UTC (link)
My brain is starting to atrophy from the lack of intelligence at the work place, so I can't really express my love for this series as I'd like. Love. Just lots and lots of love and whoa. I love the descriptiveness and the characterizations.

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